There are lots of infodumps, clumsy ones. And repetitive. For example, p. 18 has "Detallor, the Master who taught both dance and defense". Page 33 has "Master Detallor was the dance and defense master, a short wiry man who moved with a limp...." Maybe it's just bad editing--the fuller description of the character should have been at the initial appearance, and then dropped from subsequent ones.
Unnecessary head-hopping--why is one early scene from Cristov's perspective, when Kindan the protagonist of the rest of the book is there? We get other partial scenes in M'tal's perspective (but for no reason I can discern) then jump back to Kindan's.
And so many plot points seem untrue to my idea of Pern, even in this period far earlier than the majority of the books: a formal challenge/sword duel with a debasing surrender ritual for the loser, followed by virtual slavery of the loser to the winner. (And the loser miraculously accepts this, because his loss of the fight has so thoroughly impressed him with the winner's superiority.) Most of the actions of a weyrleader and the master harper as they interact with apprentice harper Kindan seem wrong, treating him as a peer instead of someone of junior rank--maybe if I'd read the book in between these 2 it would've helped, but I dunno.
And more plot points just seem incredible, period, by what's given in the text. Everything related to fighting is that way--Kindan takes down bully Merol with a sort of judo throw, after one lesson in defense. Kindan learns to fence left-handed to an expert level in 7 days--no, 6 days, as Day 1 was spent doing strength exercises. (Magic ones, I guess, that build muscle in a day.) Kindan accuses Vaxoram of being "a man who would use his strength to have a woman" because V. asked K. if K. is going to wash a girl's back and says "she's still a bit young, but so are--", which I read as him implying K. would be having sex with the girl.
I could go on, but given that I'm only on p. 65 of about 300, I think I'm better off abandoning this one. And the series as well...which I did once before back when Dolphins of Pern appeared. It's dead. I shall read no more.